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: : This is one of my untitled poems. Not to be a glory hound or show off but I need some comments on how it sounds and suggestions on how to make it better, it's for a cl reading and I really don't know if it sounds good or not. So here it is: : Sad and alone, : I want to o home, : I can't stand your harsh tone, : I'm all alone. : The want to die fills my heart with pain, : I want to run far away. : To go where no one knows me, : Why can't I leave? : Why don't they just leave me alone? : They yell and scream, and play around, : Don't they hear how it sounds? : My heart is broken and I cry to hollow ears, : Does any one ever hear? : I cry and scream my death wish aloud, : No one hears, not even a sound. : So I'll slash my wrists and die with out a single sound, : And go off Heaven bound, : Or is it hell where I'm found?

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